Peer review for 20425한희주

Peer Review for 20425한희주

Grade

According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?

4. I think the structure is clear she has adequate evidences. But each arguments of confirmation is a little similar.

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?

I think it needs another reasons.Thesis

What is the thesis?

Utopian can not exist.

Is the thesis clear and debatable?

I think the definition of the Utopian is ambiguous.

If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?

i think she selected difficult thesis. At first, it is different from people what the Utopian isAny other thoughts?
nope.Classical Argument

Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?

Yes. I can clearly identify the 5 parts of the classical argument

Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis? 

 I think the introduction is sufficient to direct the attention.

Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?

 She tried to explain what the Utopian is. However, I think it is still very difficult to define itDoes the confirmation adequately support the thesis?

Yes. it support the thesis adequately. However, I think the arguing is similar. Eventually, it said that people have different ideals and they are naturally selfish.

Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?

Yes. she refutes them adequately.

Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis? 

 Yes, it does.What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?

I think she needs another more confirmation. Eventually, it said that people have different ideas and they are naturally selfish. And it needs one more reason.Persuasion

When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis? 

 No, I was just wondering what the exact definition of the Utopian is. 

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?

 My thought was not changed

If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?

How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?

 I think it is paradoxical because she said that people have different ideals. However, she is arguing about the Utopian.

Research

Is the author using research effectively? 

 Yes, she is using it effectivelyIs the research from appropriate sources?

 Yes, the research is from appropriate sources.

Are the sources obvious?

 I don't think the sources are obvious because some sources are a little old.
Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
 yes they areAre there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
 I think the sources are appropriate. But some sources are a little old.